Wings spread, soon you'll be dead;The Demons are coming;
No where to hide, no where to go,
They fly through the night,
Up high and down low,
Ready to kill, feed on human flesh
Blood drips from their mouths,
Luscious and fresh
***
Leathery wings, blood sucking mouths,
Foot long fangs, razor sharp talons
A sight that is burnt into you mind
Ugliness, terror, Death...
These things of evil are terrible beasts of Satan,
Followers, slaves, servants, worshipers;
Essentially, Death.
The one named Mathigra (math-i-gruh) is the worst,
True evil takes over him and lurks inside him;
Ripping bloody flesh savagely is his nature
Nothing will stop this beast, he will destroy
Every thing in his path, stopping for nothing but
His master. Terror runs through the town as the
Demon tears through, killing, mudering, feeding...
11 comments:
nice opening! bravo!
nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
, to feed on
luscious?meh
foot long fangs???? a tad long "teeth like knives"
into your mind
if death is capitalized, terror ought to be as well
again dont use the term satan, its too cliché. even "the devil flows better"
(math-i-grugh)thanks! if only every good writer was as smart as you and did that!
again you use savagely, i mentioned it before lol diff poem.
"terror flys on the wings of the demons, dpreading through the town; fire in oil" something a tad bit stronger to end please.
thank you for another great work! enjoyed this one
yeah, i dont really think as much about my poems as much as you do. again thanks for the suggestions/corrections.
its probably a good thing you dont, too much thought and you cant write anything down lol
lol, yea... u shud think about writing sumthing to spice up ur blog, lol, yeah hat was stupid, but really, u shud try.
Hey accey. i dont think u remmber me but im on me luv fang on blogspot. u asked were i got the photo of fang? well ya my name is Jordan. i love Maximum Ride. and i hope we can talk soon and sare our interests. well neways, u should check out my blog when u have the chance. i have some new posts. oh and if u have myspace, mine is laberge@qmsn.com so go there if u want. well c ya later.
ok, wats ur blog?? srry i 4get.
wow accey i didnt know u were a poet
is that a comment?? well, yea... i have my times...
i think they r good in a creepy way but i shouldnt be the one talking im creeepy somethings 2
i think they r good in a creepy way but i shouldnt be the one talking im creeepy somethings 2
lol, yea.
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